Wednesday, February 15, 2017

Week 5 Story: The Rakshasa that wept

Complete devastation. Everywhere. Dead bodies of villagers were laid across the entire countryside. Fires were raging on several huts and in fields spread out. The few survivors that remained tried to hide under or behind whatever they could find, praying and hoping that the deadly rakshasa was gone and wouldn't come back. 

But Ravana wasn't done.

Ravana reappeared and searched for anybody he could find. He flipped over debris after debris from the destruction that he had caused earlier, and killed everybody he found on site. Body after body, Ravana didn't care. When found, most villagers didn't even try to run because they knew it was pointless. 

Ravana thinks he has killed all of the villagers until he hears a baby crying. He rushes over to the sounds of the crying to find a mother holding her baby. Ravana grabs the baby from the mother's arms and tosses it to the ground. He then takes the mother, snaps her in half and throws her limp body into the nearby river. Ravana approaches the baby on the ground where he left it, face down. He turns the baby over, but he suddenly stops.

As Ravana looks into the baby's eyes, it's as if he's trapped in time with no escape. In the eyes of the baby is the story of something very dark and sinister. It is Ravana's story, from beginning to now. All of the deaths, all of the disaster, all of the pain. All caused by Ravana. 

Ravana falls to the ground after snapping out of stranglehold of the baby's powers. He doesn't understand how he feels this way. He is a rakshasa, He isn't supposed feel bad about any of his actions. He thought his purpose was to destroy. Ravana begins to cry.

Suddenly, a very strong beam of light comes down from the sky. It is one of the gods. In Ravana's depressing state, he is too distracted to know what is happening. The god calls Ravana's name and begins to explain what is occurring. While the gods typically don't wish to intervene in many of the mortals' problems, they felt they had to do something. Ravana was wiping out people at an alarming rate. There seemed to be no purpose to his destruction. The gods decided to place a baby with eyes that can show a person's story in a village that was in Ravana's wrecking path.

It was a longshot, but what the gods hoped would happen, happened. Even a rakshasa can see the error in his ways.

                                               (Ravana before his demise. Link)

Author's note: I've always been interested in Rakshasas and Rakshasis, so I decided to do a story about one, but I also wanted to throw a twist in there, They are always thought to be very vicious, so I thought it would be cool to add a new concept.

Bibliography: Ramayana Online Public Domain Edition Link

5 comments:

  1. Hi Greg,
    I like this story. It is well-written. I will say that I am a bit surprised you went with a weeping Ravana. It makes me wonder if you want to introduce a Ravana who will change his ways. Your writing is usually similar to my style as far as topic, dark and twisted, which is why I would like to see what happens with this plot if you decide to pursue this story later in the semester. Here is an idea for you to continue your story, but it might end up with Ravana still being the Rakshasa we know him as...The baby could actually be his own, take a look at the stories here about Sita's birth as Ravana's daughter https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sita for some additional ideas. Great work!

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  2. Hello Greg! I liked your story. It was interesting to see a story from the eyes of Ravana. I was surprised when I read it, how violently it all started, so when the baby showed in its eyes the story of Ravana I was quite surprised and was happy to know that all the killing was ending in weeping. The plot was a sure twist, which I do enjoy so good job on making that happen.

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  3. Your title “The Rakshasa that Wept” drew me in immediately yet well-contrasted with the demise and destruction the immediately began your story. I really think this story was well-written, with good descriptions of the events (especially the whole snapping the mother in half situation). You created a great picture of how sinister and vicious Ravana is in the beginning, and your twist with the baby was unexpected but a fantastic addition to your story.

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  4. Greg, another story well written. I love babies, so your story really got my attention. There are a few grammatical errors, but nothing major. This story reminds me of a war movie - like Hacksaw Ridge. Snapping a mother in half - how gruesome and scary! What gave you the inspiration to write this story?Keep up the good work.

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  5. Very nice intro! It definitely drew me in! I love that you made Ravana have feelings for all the bad actions he caused people. I was shocked though that the baby was alive after he had thrown it. How awesome though that this plan worked that they gods had put in place. If it didn’t though don’t they have the power to just kill Ravana? Very good story!

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